I am applying to FIT in New York I need help re wording and

I am applying to FIT in New York I need help re wording and completing my essay. I did horrible in high school graduating by the skin of my teeth because I had so much going in at home. I’ve attached my essay I attempted to write and that additional information that needs to be included. Please help re word my essay and add on. I’m interested in makeup im. Wry gifted in that and FIT offers that major. I visited the school this summer and it was amazing. Please help me to express why I am a perfect fit for the school as well as who I screwed up in high school based off my essay

I am applying to FIT in New York I need help re wording and

I am applying to FIT in New York I need help re wording and completing my essay. I did horrible in high school graduating by the skin of my teeth because I had so much going in at home. I’ve attached my essay I attempted to write and that additional information that needs to be included. Please help re word my essay and add on. I’m interested in makeup im. Wry gifted in that and FIT offers that major. I visited the school this summer and it was amazing. Please help me to express why I am a perfect fit for the school as well as who I screwed up in high school based off my essay